Okay, I'm into it. The dialogue is nice. Has a good flow and feels real. I already get a sense of the characters from it. I'm most intrigued by the title. That's a wtf for sure. My only complaint is that it's so short, but I get that this is only the beginning. Always love a mystery.
Well at least someone likes it hah Yeah each scene is fairly short, so I just posted it along the split. The name should work nicely for the story, assuming I finish it and take it where I originally planned
Maybe it's just me, but I find Fridays to be a pretty slow reading day in general on the ol' Stack. But just so you know, you must finish this miniseries now as I must get the title payoff at the end. 😉
I'll tell ya what's going to give you mouth cancer, kissing Barnaby's ass. LOL. Great line. I like the little twist at the end. Why was he shot in the forearm, too? Very great start, Keith. I'm looking forward to more.
Okay, I'm into it. The dialogue is nice. Has a good flow and feels real. I already get a sense of the characters from it. I'm most intrigued by the title. That's a wtf for sure. My only complaint is that it's so short, but I get that this is only the beginning. Always love a mystery.
Well at least someone likes it hah Yeah each scene is fairly short, so I just posted it along the split. The name should work nicely for the story, assuming I finish it and take it where I originally planned
Maybe it's just me, but I find Fridays to be a pretty slow reading day in general on the ol' Stack. But just so you know, you must finish this miniseries now as I must get the title payoff at the end. 😉
Yeah it definitely seems to be lol
I'll tell ya what's going to give you mouth cancer, kissing Barnaby's ass. LOL. Great line. I like the little twist at the end. Why was he shot in the forearm, too? Very great start, Keith. I'm looking forward to more.