Hiding in the clothes rack like it’s an anemone and the boy’s a clown fish - love this imagery! And then the repeated shh-clicks and the squeaky wheel. The mother hung up like clothes. All nightmare fuel. Really well done.
This is terrifying! I used to hide in the racks of clothes when Mom or Gram was shopping. It led them to threaten me with being tethered on a leash. Now I know why they hated it so much when I vanished! I’ll never approach a clothing rack the same again.
Dammit, Keith. You just ruined every child's favorite part of clothing stores for good. I know I gave my mom a few scares when I was younger hiding in clothing racks. Way to turn the fun into something horrify.
I feel like this got really surreal and I loved it. Excellent piece with bite!
Excellent use of the TARDIS effect. You captured the sensation of experiencing the world as a child, where every nook and cranny is its own universe. Also enjoyed the underwater feel and the repeating sound of hangers clicking together on a metal ring. Very eerie and dreamy.
It was the part where his mother was hung on a hanger that got me...
Gooooood! I tried leaning on that moment
Hiding in the clothes rack like it’s an anemone and the boy’s a clown fish - love this imagery! And then the repeated shh-clicks and the squeaky wheel. The mother hung up like clothes. All nightmare fuel. Really well done.
This is terrifying! I used to hide in the racks of clothes when Mom or Gram was shopping. It led them to threaten me with being tethered on a leash. Now I know why they hated it so much when I vanished! I’ll never approach a clothing rack the same again.
Yeah, it’s the bane of parents and the joy of kids everywhere! I hope I ruined it for us adults lol
Dammit, Keith. You just ruined every child's favorite part of clothing stores for good. I know I gave my mom a few scares when I was younger hiding in clothing racks. Way to turn the fun into something horrify.
I feel like this got really surreal and I loved it. Excellent piece with bite!
Hahah thank you! I definitely went a more nightmare route than I usually do, so I’m glad you liked it! Thanks again 🙏
This was really good! The pacing and atmosphere were really well-written. Keep writing, fellow horror writer!
Thanks very much for reading and commenting🙏
That was some good spooky
This is why I don't go shopping. Well driven, the claustrophobic sensation is top-notch.
Thank you🫶 I tried to get the feel of being in those racks way back when
Damn, this reminded me of that wardrobe scene in The Lion, The Witch, and The Wardrobe, but much darker!
Thank you very much! I think I was tapping into that dreamlike childhood wonder of other unseen worlds, before I took it into nightmare territory haha
Yeah :) The mum on a coat hangar at the end definitely did that!
Excellent use of the TARDIS effect. You captured the sensation of experiencing the world as a child, where every nook and cranny is its own universe. Also enjoyed the underwater feel and the repeating sound of hangers clicking together on a metal ring. Very eerie and dreamy.
🙏Thank you very much for reading, and restacking — it means a lot to hear I got across the feelings I tried to get