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Keith Long's avatar

Thank you! I really appreciate that

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Thanks for reading! I appreciate the kind words

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Scoot's avatar

This was awful, great work. Ugh. The “dentists near me” is when my stomach started dropping.

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Keith Long's avatar

Haha thanks, Scoot! It was fun to write

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MA Knight's avatar

Brilliant—allowed my imagination to do the leg work, which is always worse. I do hate when I get those dreams…

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Keith Long's avatar

I have actually never had a teeth dream that I can recall lol

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MA Knight's avatar

It’s bc I don’t floss enough

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Keith Long's avatar

.... huh. That's ironic

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Tom Schecter's avatar

Tuesday tunes tomorrow in your honor haha

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MA Knight's avatar

What did you play? Did you sing? What’s happening?

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MA Knight's avatar

This lore is insane omfg

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Tom Schecter's avatar

🤣🤘

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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

Love this so much. Thanks for letting me have an early look!

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Keith Long's avatar

Thanks a million, especially for the quick turn around!

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Emily S Hurricane's avatar

Oh god 😂🙈 the horror laughs coming out of my mouth during this, well done

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Scott MacLeod's avatar

Always good stuff but special bravo for the creativity and elbow grease

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Keith Long's avatar

Thank you kindly

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Slater Henatay's avatar

You son of a bitch I’ve been wanting to do something like this but this is way better hahah this rules bro

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Keith Long's avatar

Hah That's funny, I was worried someone would do it before me because I posted a flash story like 10 months ago using this same concept but hadn't returned to it for lack of a good story to tell lol

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Shaina Read's avatar

Holy crap Keith. I love it. So creative.

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Keith Long's avatar

Thanks, Shaina - Means a lot to hear

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Shane Bzdok's avatar

I can only imagine the ads you are being served up after these queries lol.

This was super cool, super fresh, and super creepy, Keith. Loved it!

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Keith Long's avatar

Yeaaah, all in service of the story lol Thank you

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Zivah's avatar

Hoooooooo, boy!

I *loved* reading this so much. I felt like I was watching an extreme unravelling. I could see the person in my mind’s eye - what’s left of him.

Brilliant!

So damn creepy though….

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Keith Long's avatar

It is funny how vivid something so minimal can be lol thanks a billion!

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Gaby Brogan's avatar

Oh my god, this is so cool! And awful, and chilling. I love fresh takes on format like this.

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Keith Long's avatar

Thank you! I love messing around with form, it can really produce some interesting results

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Garen Marie's avatar

Once again you are the king of the creative format! So good. But you might want to clear your search history now. ;)

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Keith Long's avatar

Thank you thank you! 😄 idk, I kinda like keeping the targeted ads on their toes lol

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Michael S. Atkinson's avatar

Well, at least I hope the guy found a no tolls route, because those can be a pain if you don't budget properly. This may not be a concern for him anymore, but even so.

[But seriously, this was great, and also terrifying, and as much as I am in awe of your work here I am not clicking on any of those links at all.]

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Keith Long's avatar

Hitting a toll with no cash/coins used to be the true nightmare. [thank you very much — also, I wouldn’t. Maybe that Vice article at the end, because it’s crazy ]

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Judith Ashcraft's avatar

This was great. Really creative way to tell a horrifying story. And it started out so innocently.

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Keith Long's avatar

Thank you very much! All the worst stories always do lol

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Prince Kudu’Ra's avatar

😬 Yeesh.

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Keith Long's avatar

🌝yeah lol

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