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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Kim is a spoon. My God.

Making It Up As I Go Alone's avatar

Bleak but also beautiful. So good, thank you.

Keith Long's avatar

Thank you, Richard - I'm glad those feelings came through

MA Knight's avatar

I really love this, Keith. Nobody sees, but you shared a glimpse here

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks🙏means a lot

Emily S Hurricane's avatar

Gorgeous and also very sad. 💔 The voice is so strong, too. Beautifully written. The hole is an attractive but deadly place to go.

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks, Emily 🙏 I'm glad it made you feel something

Emily S Hurricane's avatar

A lot of things 💗

Happy Nielsen's avatar

So depressing but still somehow a fun read. Loved it

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks very much 😬

Jim J Wilsky's avatar

When you feel it deep - the darkness, doom and hopelessness, you know the writing is good. Great job Keith. - Jim

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks Jim, means's lot to hear from the writers i love reading🙏

Nick Buchheit's avatar

There are a lot of Jimmy Tooth’s out there. This was a great one.

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks Nick 🙏

Garen Marie's avatar

A modern through the looking glass. A tale of what ifs and whys and what nows. There’s an underlying desperation but also a strange sense of calm. Really well done. Worth another read.

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks Garden - means a lot to hear from those I respect 🙏

EJ Trask's avatar

There is a lot to like here Keith but "gone like the sleeves on a vest" got me good.

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks - and yes, its a golden line. Heard it from a nurse when I worked in a rehab.

Ian Patterson's avatar

Nice work Keith. I kept hearing Cat Power's In This Hole while reading it, which really fit how bleak it felt.

Keith Long's avatar

I don't know it, I'll have to check it out - thanks for reading 🙏

Layne Mercer's avatar

Great voice! Has a dark lyricism•

Will Boucher's avatar

Fucking love this spoon

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks man. 😬

Nick Winney's avatar

Mr Long. immense respect. The spoon was a genius touch. The aching sadness. the magnetic inevitability of the black hole, but it's the world that is black, his life is the hole and the hole is the light.

genuine sadness welling up. powerful writing Keith. 😎

Keith Long's avatar

Thank you so much Nick, your words sink into my soul and will sit there till they resurface on imposed syndrome days <3

Dylan Bosworth's avatar

Gorgeous writing, Keith. As someone in recovery, this made me feel a whole lot. Every story you write, you write with experience. Even down into the dark, there's no difference. Good on you for those immersive talents.

Keith Long's avatar

Thank you and thank you and thank you. I'm glad it didn't feel gimmicky or ignorant - giving a voice to voiceless things is pretty much the highest goal and compliment

Claudia Befu's avatar

You're a brilliant writer. Great story, perfect pacing, loved the voice of the character.

Keith Long's avatar

Wow idk what to say! Big compliments!🙏 Thanks so very much!

Liz Zimmers's avatar

The voice here is exquisite. Jimmy Tooth is a character destined to become a classic. I loved every word of this.

Keith Long's avatar

Thanks, Liz 🙏 I hope Jimmy lives in peoples heads and makes them think